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Childhood Obesity In a study has been done by American Fitness; a very large percentage of kids in America are overweight or obesity compared to Western European kids. However, what is the problem here? Nowadays, we’re having a problem with our children; it is calling “Childhood Obesity”. When I came to the United State of America, it was very different place and culture to where I originally came from which is Vietnam. I saw McDonald, KFC, and other fast food restaurant everywhere. There are at least 2-10 food restaurants everywhere I go. Food is everywhere; however they are not good and healthy food at all. Childhood obesity is such a huge problem within American people’s household; as a parent, we should know what is best and what is not good to feed our kid when they were still a child and without knowingly. Back in ten years ago, when Computer- Internet was very widely used, Xbox or PlayStation were also the most enjoyable electronic machine. Children tended to stop their natural activity outside the park or their backyard; instead they liked to enjoy a game on a Television screen. These children spent day and night in front of a computer or a Television, they sitting down and carry a console to control the game and when they get tired, they would stand up and find something to eat or to drink. It is a very bad habit for everyone in any age. Television show is so exciting to watch we just can’t resist living without them; the result is that we’re helping the fat in our body tend to expand and our body gains weight by sitting and doing nothing. All of these tools of convenience lead to a reduction in physical activity (American Fitness, pg2) Secondly, Food is another important factor that led to childhood obesity. Children like to eat at random food at random time. They don’t have a chance to choose the food and when they do, it will be great tasting food instead of healthy food. This is true because healthy food usually contain vegetable which is hated by most of the kid. French fries, combo burger, soft drink… they’re surely great tasting food but we forgot that they’re not the best and healthy food. Soft drink and high-calorie food are not very good choice for children; however they can’t avoid without the guiding of adult. How much nutrition a child consuming per day is basic on what he/she eats; a three major meals, water, vegetable and small serving between the major meals are the basic standard of nutrition consumption. The biggest barrier for children is they like to eat what taste better instead of what is healthier. Doughnut, soft drink, cupcake… what is the number common factor between these kind of food and drink? The answer is sugar. They contain a very large percent of sugar, which is not good. Sugar has been used for centuries in product such as food, medicine, alcohol beverage and especially candy. Children do not realize about how bad sugar is when a large amount of sugar going inside the body. Eat too much sugar can create extra fat and toxicant, that extra energy also will be store around the belly and increase the mass of fat. This is extremely dangerous and can lead to diabetes, heart disease, obesity… (Jorge Cruise) In additional, when it comes to food, we need money to buy good and healthy food. There is a large contrast between rich people being able to eat healthy food and poor people who likes to buy high calories and high fat food just because they’re cheaper and taste better. I can tell a short funny comparison between the U.S and Vietnam. In the U.S, rich people have money and have more choice to choose healthy food; unlike people with low income won’t have too many choice. So the result is rich people will have a better shape than poor people. In Vietnam, poor people have less money and will consume more vegetable so they will stay thin; the rich Vietnamese have more money and they feed their child more nutrition food that led to weight gaining. Money is a major resource to indicate what kind of food parent can provide for their children. Many parent have a wrong idea of how and what their child should eat; they tend to choose cheap and great tasting food instead of fresh and raw food. Children walk into place such as Wal-Mart, they usually blindfold by all the fancy and colored candy, chip or French fried; as their parents, we all love our kids and willing to provide kids all the food he/she wants. We should stop doing this and explain to our children that we can’t afford all the fancy stuff instead we should eat healthy. By doing this, when the child growing up, he/she will have a basic idea of what they can afford and what is best to buy. Have you ever think about what make the food you bought from the local store or fast food chain taste so great even though it was not look like anything compare to the advertising picture? If you don’t, then there’s a chance that you’re consuming a small percentage of monosodium glutamate. This substance is combination of salt and glutamic acid (Effect of monosodium glutamate, page 1) used to mix with the food in some restaurant. It is a flavor that makes the food taste better than its actually state. The result is when children consume food that containing monosodium, their brain and nerve will absorb the great tasting and make the child wanting to eat more. It is similar to hypnotizing a person. The effect of this fake flavor is totally ridiculous. A study showed that, in a group of male mice who were feeding food contained monosodium glutamate (MSG) has gained more weight and their heart showed sign of increasing in mass. MSG is just one in a hundred thousand of other dangerous substance flavor that added to food, even in fresh food such as fruit, vegetable…MSG is one of the biggest reason that leading to Heart coronary disease. Before we buy any kind of food in store, the first thing is too look for the ingredient and any extra containing in the food or drink; it is not just for our kid safety but for your own health. Our education is less focus on the health of student and children. Health class is usually required for all students in High school, but what about young child? They don’t have a chance to learn about what is and what is not healthy food. Most public schools are free and providing free lunch for low income student, which is a good thing. However, we aren’t aware of what are our kid consuming beside the main meal. I was a high school student in U.S for three years and I have to say the free food that the school system provides us tasted great and looked tasty. A meal of chicken nugget with corn, brownie, carrot and a small cup of milk aren’t bad at all. The problem is the side meal that most of the kids in my school bought. After the main meal, most of the student will likely to buy a soft drink at the vending machine, a snack or an extra pizza. This extra meal added up a great number of calories and fat inside the body. According to the CDC, large portion sizes of food and frequent snaking are all factors in our kids high calorie consuming. This problem needs to be stop by removing all the soft drink or high calorie candy or snack inside the campus. We are not educating the kids about a healthy life; instead, we are giving obesity a hand to bring our child closer all kind of side effect and diseases caused by poor nutrition and high in calorie food. Therefore, the school and parent should working together and bring in the best and healthiest food for our children. Lastly, there’s a reason that lead to childhood obesity but has nothing to do with the food, lack of work out or short of money. It’s call genetic. When a father and a mother producing a child, the sperm will carry the DNA and genes of the father while the egg will carry the DNA and genes of the mother. Those 2 things will add up together and create a new born child. The child will carry both genetic of the father and the mother. So why does genetic making child obesity? Our ancestor has developed a functional body to store food and fat to survive the harsh condition. Nowadays, the availability of food is very normally; we can buy food from anywhere we go. Therefore, our body system will likely to hold more extra calorie and fat under the skin, if these fat does not dissolve, they will make the body gain more weigh. This is generally thinking of why we have a large percentage of obesity in the recent century. It’s the same for children after they were born; if the father or mother had trouble with weight and other disease, the child may have the same problem in the future. It is best to realize as soon as possible if the child has carry on the disease from his/her parent or not. Childhood obesity is very familiar in the U.S society. There are many things happen against overweight kid. Children may face many problem when they grow up; beside the risk of obesity, diabetes or high blood pressure there’s a chance they will be bullying in school by kid that are fitting. The future of our children does not look so bright if we keep ignore what they do and what they eat. Parent who don’t have time to play with their kids will probably purchase a set of video game, a box of meal from McDonald and bring it home for their kid before going to work. What we can do is we should bring our child out, let them join a sport in school or maybe locally; fitness house such as YMCA or L.A fitness are another good choice to bring the kids in and make them work out under instruction. BMI (Body Mass Index) is an easy method to measure how healthy our children are. According to the CDF, BMI is the most widely accepted method to screen for overweight and obesity in kids and teen (American fitness, pg.3). In children body system, they will need more protein and vitamin to grow tissue of muscle and bone; therefore, white meat such as chicken or fish are necessary. Red meat will provide more calcium and all kind of nutrition that need for the body. Most kids hate to eat vegetable, but vegetable is very important. Each kind of vegetable has different color and function; they are mostly to bring down blood pressure, regenerate tissue under skin, provide great source of vitamin and more. Our children is our future, we must help to have a better health and giving more concern in what they do and what they eat. Childhood obesity rate is increasing incredibly nowadays. Bad eating habit and lack of activities are the two main reasons why American children gaining weight so fast over the year. Our country should have a law against high fat food, drink that contain toxic, increase tax of sugar… Childhood obesity is a serious problem; it is preventable. However, as the parent of our children, we are ignoring the fact that our child is eating unhealthy food just because they’re cheaper and taste better. We should encourage our children to go out and doing activity or at least teach them how to play a sport. That’s the least we can do to prevent our child from obesity or other disease. Our hope is still there; let’s do our best to erase obesity out of our society. Edited by Uruguay1950 16-03-2012 03:37 |
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Here is my Professor's comment : It looks like a position paper. What are the 3 positions you have chosen to outline in this paper? State them in the beginning and then write about each of them. Who has taken these position and why? This paper should be completely objective - you should be simply stating what others think , not arguing your own position | 16/03/2012 03:39 |
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 I didn't read all your essay but one thing I can tell you is that I don't see three positions in the beginning of the essay. I bet a person like Cellog or Dee can help you on this. I think your prof. Is looking for more about the concrete structure of the essay rather than content of the subject. Good luck and I am amazed with your skillset to utlize whatever resources you have. Who knew it would be Bulletin Board of the Internet game. |
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Thanks Lantre, i appreciate your comment | 16/03/2012 05:06 |
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Uruguay1950 said: Childhood Obesity In a 2011 study done by American Fitness IT WAS FOUND THAT; a very large percentage of kids in America are overweight or OBESE compared to Western European kids. Why? When I came to the United State of America FROM VIETNAM I FOUND it was very different place and culture to where I BEEN RAISED. I saw McDonaldS, KFC, and other fast food restaurantS FILLED WITH CHILDREN ON EVERY CORNER, IN THE SHOPPING CENTERS, IN MY SCHOOL EVEN IN GAS STATIONS. IN AMERICA Food is everywhere; however THE MENU CHOICES ARE NOT HEALTHY. AMERICAN CULTURE CHERISHES THIER CHILDREN. HOW IS IT THAT THE SAME PARENTS THAT WORK SO HARD ON THEIR CHILDREN'S EDUCATION AND SPORTS ACHIEVEMENT TURN A BLIND EYE TO THE ISSUES OF DIET AND PERSONAL HEALTH IN THIER PARENTING? ...here is what i would do with the first paragraph ... rabbitfufu |
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If you follow this formula, you will get an A. Every time. You didn't write an outline first. You should do that before you start to write. I. Intro - Major Theme II. Attack 1 (2nd strongest position) A. Evidence to support B. More of same C. Still More D. Concluding Transition Sentence III Attack 2 (Strongest Position) A. Evidence to support B. More of same C. Still More D. Concluding Transition Sentence IV Attack 3 (Some unoriginal thought that is totally non-controversial and puts person in "Yes" frame of mind) A Evidence to support B. More of same C. Still More D. Concluding Transition Sentence V Combining ideas given in previous 3 paragraphs to build a coherent message or original idea (This is the real message. This is what you are convincing the person of. By this time, they should be set up for the kill) A, B, C = Reasoning behind this message/idea...you should be arguing in a pure sense here. IF A & B & C Then D must be true... and here's why. VI. Conclusion A. Restatement of Intro and major Ideas B. Insightful remark or question C. Concluding Statement. Think of your paper like a musical... Totally copied from : http://www.musicals101.com Because song placement is of vital importance in the development of a musical, the composer and lyricist usually work closely with the librettist (the script or "book" writer) to plan each number. Once a show goes into production, the director and producers also have a say in this process. Three song choices are of particular importance – The Opening Number sets the tone for the rest of the show. It is not unusual for this song to be written after the rest of a show is in place. The bawdy farce A Funny Thing Happened On the Way To the Forum originally opened by proclaiming that "Love Is In the Air," a bouncy song that left audiences expecting a sweet romantic comedy. Consequently, it took half an act for them to get attuned to the zany farce that followed. Director George Abbott asked for a replacement, and songwriter Stephen Sondheim came up with the raucous "Comedy Tonight." From the moment the new opening was introduced, the entire show got a better reception. (Note – shows that open with extended dialogue still set the tone for the evening with their first songs, such as My Fair Lady's "Why Can't the English Teach Their Children How to Speak?") ---- This is intro and first position/idea The Main "I Want" Song comes early in the first act, with one or more of the main characters singing about the key motivating desire that will propel everyone (including the audience) through the remainder of the show. In many cases, these songs literally include the words "I want," "I wish" or "I've got to." Classic examples include My Fair Lady's "Wouldn't It Be Loverly," Carnival's "Mira," The Sound of Music's "I Have Confidence" and "King of Broadway" in The Producers. --- This is the second idea. The Eleven O'clock Number takes place about midway through Act Two. It can be a ballad ("This Nearly Was Mine" in South Pacific, "Memory" in Cats), charm song ("Hello, Dolly!") or comedy showpiece ("Brush Up Your Shakespeare" in Kiss Me Kate, "Betrayed" in The Producers). It does not necessarily have to mark a climactic moment in the plot, but it must be strong enough to energize the audience for the final scenes. (Note: since curtain times are earlier than in years past, this number now takes place around 10:00 PM.) --- This is the third, lesser idea/position...It should be something that people basically already know, you are just reinforcing the idea and putting them into the "Yes" frame of mind... The Finale should carry an emotional wallop, leaving audiences with a powerful last impression. This is usually done by reprising one of score's most emotion-packed numbers. Showboat closes with a family reunion as Joe sings another chorus of "Old Man River," and Les Miserables brings on ghosts of the past to sing an encore of "Do You Hear the People Sing?" The far less frequently used alternative approach is to introduce a rousing new song, like "You Can't Stop the Beat" in Hairspray. --- Here is your original idea paragraph... A reprise is when all or part of a song is repeated to make a dramatic point and (usually) to energize the end of a scene. In the stage version of Funny Girl, Nick Arnstein sings a reprise of Fanny's "Don't Rain on My Parade" to signify his need for independence and end a crucial scene. Fanny later reprises the same song at the end of the show to declare that life will go on without Nick and to finish the final scene with an emotional flourish. --- This is your conclusion. Edited by @rebsiot 16-03-2012 05:40 |
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There is a structure for the basic three paragraph essay, which is what it looks like your professor is looking for and it can be found here. http://lrs.ed.uiuc.edu/students/fwalters/essaybasic.html In your case, it looks like your main theme is Childhood obesity. What are the three positions you are discussing? They can be things such as: Childhood obesity causes high blood pressure. Childhood obesity causes diabetes. Childhood obesity causes ugliness. Childhood obesity causes lower lifetime income. Childhood obesity causes higher medical costs. Childhood obesity causes death. Any of these positions have to then be supported by other people via cited sources. As @Reb stated, you should first have your outline. It will look something like this: I. Introduction II. Topic 1 III. Topic 2 IV. Topic 3 V. Conclusion In your introduction, you can start with your coming to America anecdote. After the anecdote, you should state your three positions. The final sentence should be a transitional sentence that leads into your first topic. This transitional sentence is often written after the fist Topical paragraph has been written. The first sentence of each topic should be an impact sentence that clearly states the point of what you are about to discuss. It should clearly state your main topic for the paragraph, and should directly reflect what you stated in your introduction. In the body of each paragraph, you should embed your supporting evidence, and properly cite your source. It is much easier to write your topic sentences first because they well direct what the rest of the paragraph is all about. You can write all three first, and if they don't make sense, it's easy to go back and rework it. Diving in with a bad topic sentence is a recipe for disaster. Having a strong one, however, will make the rest of it incredibly easy to write. The final sentence of each paragraph should transition into the next paragraph. Like the transition from the intro, these are often written after the topic sentences are all written. The conclusion should restate your three main points, and not introduce any new information. It can give a last little bit of your anecdotal story from the intro, but again, do not introduce any new information about your three main points. If you couldn't make your whole point in the three topic paragraphs, then you need to revisit them and fix that. In this kind of writing, you want to keep it short, and concise. Even though there is a lot to say on a specific topic, don't let yourself get carried away with it. You want your three most important positions to shine, not get drowned out by all the extra fluff. You're trying to do a Navy SEALs type surgical strike, not a long drawn out Army engagement. Make each point, support it with facts, and get the hell out. Edited by Mozleron 16-03-2012 07:00 |
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Mozleron said: You want your three most important positions to shine, not get drowned out by all the extra fluff. You're trying to do a Navy SEALs type surgical strike, not a long drawn out Army engagement. Make each point, support it with facts, and get the hell out. Edited by Mozleron 16-03-2012 07:00 You can apply this to women, also. |
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@rebsiot said: Mozleron said: You want your three most important positions to shine, not get drowned out by all the extra fluff. You're trying to do a Navy SEALs type surgical strike, not a long drawn out Army engagement. Make each point, support it with facts, and get the hell out. Edited by Mozleron 16-03-2012 07:00 You can apply this to women, also. Agreed. |
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